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ELMO’S INVENTION: CHAPTER 5, ELMO’S PRISON

But first, a message from my poet friend, Steve.

Local poet Steve Kupferschmid has published a poetry chapbook with Kelsay Books entitled “Weight of Water.” The thirty-one poems in the collection reflect upon the joys and sorrows of youth and age, of love and loss. Compact in form yet rich in imagery, this collection offers an enjoyable, memorable read. Available from Amazon or any bookstore.

I have heard my friend, Steve, read his poems and they call to mind the poems of Billy Collins. Poems which tell a story, but at the same time, have a deeper meaning.

CHAPTER 5

ELMO’S PRISON

When Kingsley rose, everyone looked in his direction.  It was not unprecedented that he would speak at a meeting, but it was a rare occurrence.  What Kingsley said to the group would usually solve the problem at hand.  Elmo prepared to hear great things from Kingsley and gain insight on how to fix his machine.

After once again clearing his throat, whether to gain everyone’s attention or because he found talking to be an effort, no one was sure, he began to speak.  “Elmo, you must be rewarded for your effort.  Although you have not accomplished what you set out to accomplish, and perhaps never will, your invention could possibly change the course of society.  I have no doubt that mankind will greatly benefit from your invention, if they choose to embrace its benefits is a different matter.  Only time will tell.”

Elmo, along with the rest of the group, was both puzzled and full of anticipation.

Kingsley continued, “However, I am a mathematician and not an ethicist and cannot predict the consequences of your discovery.”

Elmo said, “I am totally lost.  You say I have made a great discovery, yet at the same time say that its use will produce ethical problems.”

“That’s correct, Elmo.  Your invention, in my mind, would be the perfect prison.”

Elmo, along with William and James, stared at Kingsley in total disbelief, and then slowly began to understand what he was saying.

After a few moments of deep thought, Harold Kinter voiced his thoughts to the gathering, “Of course, I can see it now.  Elmo, your invention, though unintended, could do away with prisons as we know them.  Year-long sentences could be served in a matter of minutes.  It would save society millions of dollars and save prisoners from the dangers inherent in incarceration.

“Think of it!  No matter what the length of a prisoner’s sentence, the punishment could be delivered in a matter of minutes.  Your invention could funnel money into projects that benefit society and save prisoners from harm.”

They all looked at Elmo.  His visage was one of disappointment and disbelief.  “I meant my invention to be a time machine; instead, you say I invented the perfect prison.  I failed.”

Kingsley stepped totally out of character and attempted to comfort his colleague.  “Elmo, some of the greatest discoveries in the world were made by accident.  Look at all the lives that were saved by the discovery of penicillin.  If Fleming had not noticed that petri dish with mold and dying bacteria, who knows how long it would have taken for someone else to discover that life-saving antibiotic.

“Think of the value of your discovery, and someday I am sure that you will determine the principle behind the device.  With your invention, no matter the length of a prisoner’s sentence it could be served in minutes with virtually no expense to society.  And when it comes to a death sentence, your machine can accomplish that too, but a death sentence is a death sentence no matter how it is accomplished.

Then James Forsyth began to speak, “I can think of another question which requires an answer. After a prisoner serves his term in your machine, what is his mental state? Is his mind the same as it was before the prison term? Or does his mind age along with his body?  Although I cannot imagine how the mind ages with the lack of experience.”

Elmo said, “I can think of no answer to the question of mind aging. I feel this can only be determined with the test of a human subject. But I must add I owe a great deal of gratitude for introducing important questions I had not considered.” 

“Your device could save society millions, perhaps billions of dollars and funnel the revenue into efforts that would better society.  Education, medical research, providing for the elderly and that is only the tip of the iceberg of what could be affected by this machine.  But I fear there will be obstacles to this scenario which I cannot anticipate.

“You see, our society is inconsistent.  It professes one set of values yet lives by another.  We say how important education is, but we do not support it the way we should, not to mention that the key to education is parental input.  We pay lip service to medical advancement, but do not fund the conjecture that could become reality.  And when a discovery is made, many times it is beyond the reach of those who would benefit.  We say we value the elderly yet turn away when we could make their final years more comfortable. 

“I fear there will be great objection to your discovery but cannot anticipate the form it will take.  Good luck, Elmo.  You have a difficult path ahead of you.”

July 3, 2026 at 12:22 pm Leave a comment

Elmo’s Invention Chapter VII

ALL HELL BREAKS LOOSE

It was the morning of the sixth day after The New York Times people left town.  The article about Elmo and his invention was published in The Los Alamos Herald and was the impetus for the visit from the Times. Much to Mildred’s joy and astonishment there were no immediate repercussions from the article in The New York Times.  The residents of Los Alamos had already had their feathers ruffled by the topic and there were no further reactions.  Elmo and Mildred began to relax, confident that all the problems involved with the invention were behind them.  That morning Mildred asked Elmo, “Could you run out and get the paper?  I’ll make you a nice breakfast before you go to work.”  Mildred had mellowed and Elmo’s life was back to normal, but that was about to change in seconds.

Elmo opened the front door, took a few steps and then slowly backed up and closed the door.    Their usually quiet street was overflowing with cars, buses and a great mass of people milling around appearing to anticipate something.  Elmo had no idea what was going on but had a very bad feeling.  Mildred was not going to like this.  He peered through the window and it was then he caught sight of a placard where his name appeared being carried towards his house.

Elmo had little choice.  He had to let Mildred know that something was going on.  If he didn’t, it would be like trying to hide a herd of elephants taking up residence on their front yard.  He gently called, “Oh Mil, there’s something I think you should see.  I’m sure it won’t amount to much.”

She entered the front room and asked, “What won’t amount to much?”

As she approached the front window Elmo pushed back the curtains.  Mildred stood as if paralyzed, and then shouted, “I knew it!  I told you talking to The Times was a big mistake.  But no, you were going to save the world.”  She stormed out of the room leaving Elmo alone with his thoughts of how this would all work out.

Soon more placards appeared identifying the various organizations present.  There was The Friends and Relatives of Prisoners.  They were joined by The Society of Prison Guards and another group representing ex-cons.  A large group of construction workers were present, their group wearing hard hats, were involved in the building of prisons.  Along with their signs, they paraded a scarecrow suspended from a pole with of picture of Elmo’s face attached to the head.  

Keeping to themselves, Elmo spied another small group which stood out like a sore thumb.  Outfitted in expensive suits and equally expensive shoes, they held professionally manufactured signs proclaiming them as The Society of Defense Lawyers.  Their main beef was the possible elimination of endless appeals which kept them supplied with their expensive attire.

Elmo found it strange, but not disappointing, that this great milling crowd of protesters was not protesting.  He also noticed that a buffer zone was carefully observed between the house and the crowd.  The answer to his observation of inactivity soon became clear when the news trucks began to arrive.  What was the purpose of a protest if there was no one there to record it?  Elmo thought it was something like that tree falling in the forest and no one heard it.  He noticed something else most disturbing.  There was a secondary crowd forming in the distance away from main body of protesters.  He could not recognize individual faces but he knew who they were.  They were the residents of Los Alamos come to witness the spectacle.  This would anger Mildred even more.  

Once the cameras were in place and the reporters had their makeup on and were holding microphones, the crowd began to come alive holding up signs and voicing their respective opinions.  

But all was not quite finished.  The icing on the protest cake was the arrival, with as many lights flashing as possible and sirens wailing, of the Los Alamos police.  Four police cars came to a skidding halt on Elmo’s front yard creating deep tire tracks.  The chief of the Los Alamos police, John McFurdy first went over to the press and diligently spelled his name for them.  Then he went to Elmo’s front door and knocked.  Elmo asked the chief in and offered him a cup of coffee.  Sitting at the kitchen table, McFurdy said, “All the groups out there obtained permits to protest.  There is nothing we can do but insure that no damage happens to your property.”

Elmo recalled the deep groves he had observed in his front yard.

Chief McFurdy continued, “State police have formed a perimeter around you house to ensure that no one without a permit enters the protest zone.”

Elmo knew that the perimeter was not that great.  His neighbors had already broken it. The term ‘protest zone’ made the hairs on the back of Elmo’s neck stand on end.

After McFurdy left, Elmo noticed that six officers had stationed themselves between Elmo’s house and the press.  There was a hushed silence.  The first camera lights came on and it was as if someone threw a switch: All hell broke loose.

The once silent crowd instantly created a roar.  Each group shouted their rehearsed chants.  Soon after the beginning of the protest, Elmo’s effigy burst into flames.  The various groups began to hurl eggs and tomatoes at Elmo’s house and the police. The lawyer’s contingent hurled non-libelous insults and carefully recorded what they said.  A few rocks were thrown, later determined to come from the area populated by the ex-cons, but no real damage was done to the house or bystanders including the police.

The protest went on for two days while the press conducted interviews.  One woman came forward and held up a copy of The New York Times pointing to the before and after pictures of Elmo’s demonstration shouting, “My son is in prison.  I don’t want him turned to ash.”  Behind her stood a grizzled ex-con, his shaved head glistening in the sun.  “Nobody is putting me in no fucking death chamber,” indicating his life of crime was not yet over.  

After the media had their film and interviews they began to pack-up and leave.  With the media gone the protesters lost their enthusiasm and quietly slipped away leaving a mess of litter and protest signs.  There were some portable toilets available, but not nearly enough to handle the large crowd, so the area around Elmo’s home was not only a mess but also a health hazard.

* * *

Once the protesters had left, Kingsley Dasher slowly made his way to Elmo’s residence not knowing what he would find.  He climbed the front steps and knocked on the door.  The Elmo that greeted him was one he didn’t know.  The man appeared beaten, the image of a lost soul.  Before he could stop himself, Kingsley asked, “How are you doing, Elmo?”

Elmo stood with slumped shoulders, and dark-rimmed eyes answered with a raspy voice, “I’ve been better.”

“May I come in?”

“Of course.  I wouldn’t mind a little company right now.”  Elmo led his friend into the living room and offered him a seat.

Kingsley said, “You had to endure quite a ruckus, Elmo.  I feel guilty that I was the one who pointed out the obvious use of your invention.  I suspected something might happen once the existence of your invention was made known, but I never imagined the level of hostility.  The reality is our society is a fickle society.  It professes one set of values, but it is mere lip service.  The values that are actually in practice are completely different from those voiced.  

“Money is the value our society holds dearest.

“Your invention would have saved millions of dollars, perhaps billions in doing away with the prison system and at the same time providing swift justice for the guilty.  But at the same time it would have deprived hundreds maybe thousands of people of their livelihood.  Construction workers and prison guards would suffer, and let us not forget the lawyers with their endless appeals.  Society has problems with such sudden changes no matter how beneficial they are.”

Kingsley then took a moment to look around and wondered where Mildred was.  “How is Mildred handling all this?”

“Not very well.  The day the protests began she left for her sister’s home in Santa Fe.  I call but she refuses to talk to me.”

“I’m sure she’ll come around once all this is over.  It will just take some time.  This whole experience was quite a blow for both of you.  To say it was a life-disrupting event would be putting it mildly.”

The two men sat in silence for a while and then the phone rang.  Elmo jumped up hoping it was Mildred but he was to be extremely disappointed and further upset.

“Hello,” he said.

Kingsley watched Elmo’s face and immediately knew the news was not good.  Elmo had little to say during the short call.  After hanging up, he told Kingsley, “That was a representative of the American Civil Liberties Union calling to notify me that they are issuing a class-action lawsuit on behalf of prisoners, families of prisoners and ex-convicts.  Apparently there are organizations of defense lawyers also preparing lawsuits.  This whole thing is just getting worse and worse.

I was hoping to patent the device and make some money.  Now it appears it may cost me everything I have.  This is definitely not going to bring Mildred home.”

Kingsley knew that Elmo needed to be alone.  He rose and said, “I would suggest you issue a statement saying that upon further consideration, you’ve decided to discontinue any further attempts in patenting or selling your machine.

“Your science was sound, Elmo.  Society just wasn’t prepared for such a sudden advance.”

Kingsley left Elmo sitting on the couch, a man in love with science and defied by society.

ALL HELL BREAKS LOOSE

It was the morning of the sixth day after The New York Times people left town.  The article about Elmo and his invention was published in The Los Alamos Herald and was the impetus for the visit from the Times. Much to Mildred’s joy and astonishment there were no immediate repercussions from the article in The New York Times.  The residents of Los Alamos had already had their feathers ruffled by the topic and there were no further reactions.  Elmo and Mildred began to relax, confident that all the problems involved with the invention were behind them.  That morning Mildred asked Elmo, “Could you run out and get the paper?  I’ll make you a nice breakfast before you go to work.”  Mildred had mellowed and Elmo’s life was back to normal, but that was about to change in seconds.

Elmo opened the front door, took a few steps and then slowly backed up and closed the door.    Their usually quiet street was overflowing with cars, buses and a great mass of people milling around appearing to anticipate something.  Elmo had no idea what was going on but had a very bad feeling.  Mildred was not going to like this.  He peered through the window and it was then he caught sight of a placard where his name appeared being carried towards his house.

Elmo had little choice.  He had to let Mildred know that something was going on.  If he didn’t, it would be like trying to hide a herd of elephants taking up residence on their front yard.  He gently called, “Oh Mil, there’s something I think you should see.  I’m sure it won’t amount to much.”

She entered the front room and asked, “What won’t amount to much?”

As she approached the front window Elmo pushed back the curtains.  Mildred stood as if paralyzed, and then shouted, “I knew it!  I told you talking to The Times was a big mistake.  But no, you were going to save the world.”  She stormed out of the room leaving Elmo alone with his thoughts of how this would all work out.

Soon more placards appeared identifying the various organizations present.  There was The Friends and Relatives of Prisoners.  They were joined by The Society of Prison Guards and another group representing ex-cons.  A large group of construction workers were present, their group wearing hard hats, were involved in the building of prisons.  Along with their signs, they paraded a scarecrow suspended from a pole with of picture of Elmo’s face attached to the head.  

Keeping to themselves, Elmo spied another small group which stood out like a sore thumb.  Outfitted in expensive suits and equally expensive shoes, they held professionally manufactured signs proclaiming them as The Society of Defense Lawyers.  Their main beef was the possible elimination of endless appeals which kept them supplied with their expensive attire.

Elmo found it strange, but not disappointing, that this great milling crowd of protesters was not protesting.  He also noticed that a buffer zone was carefully observed between the house and the crowd.  The answer to his observation of inactivity soon became clear when the news trucks began to arrive.  What was the purpose of a protest if there was no one there to record it?  Elmo thought it was something like that tree falling in the forest and no one heard it.  He noticed something else most disturbing.  There was a secondary crowd forming in the distance away from main body of protesters.  He could not recognize individual faces but he knew who they were.  They were the residents of Los Alamos come to witness the spectacle.  This would anger Mildred even more.  

Once the cameras were in place and the reporters had their makeup on and were holding microphones, the crowd began to come alive holding up signs and voicing their respective opinions.  

But all was not quite finished.  The icing on the protest cake was the arrival, with as many lights flashing as possible and sirens wailing, of the Los Alamos police.  Four police cars came to a skidding halt on Elmo’s front yard creating deep tire tracks.  The chief of the Los Alamos police, John McFurdy first went over to the press and diligently spelled his name for them.  Then he went to Elmo’s front door and knocked.  Elmo asked the chief in and offered him a cup of coffee.  Sitting at the kitchen table, McFurdy said, “All the groups out there obtained permits to protest.  There is nothing we can do but insure that no damage happens to your property.”

Elmo recalled the deep groves he had observed in his front yard.

Chief McFurdy continued, “State police have formed a perimeter around you house to ensure that no one without a permit enters the protest zone.”

Elmo knew that the perimeter was not that great.  His neighbors had already broken it. The term ‘protest zone’ made the hairs on the back of Elmo’s neck stand on end.

After McFurdy left, Elmo noticed that six officers had stationed themselves between Elmo’s house and the press.  There was a hushed silence.  The first camera lights came on and it was as if someone threw a switch: All hell broke loose.

The once silent crowd instantly created a roar.  Each group shouted their rehearsed chants.  Soon after the beginning of the protest, Elmo’s effigy burst into flames.  The various groups began to hurl eggs and tomatoes at Elmo’s house and the police. The lawyer’s contingent hurled non-libelous insults and carefully recorded what they said.  A few rocks were thrown, later determined to come from the area populated by the ex-cons, but no real damage was done to the house or bystanders including the police.

The protest went on for two days while the press conducted interviews.  One woman came forward and held up a copy of The New York Times pointing to the before and after pictures of Elmo’s demonstration shouting, “My son is in prison.  I don’t want him turned to ash.”  Behind her stood a grizzled ex-con, his shaved head glistening in the sun.  “Nobody is putting me in no fucking death chamber,” indicating his life of crime was not yet over.  

After the media had their film and interviews they began to pack-up and leave.  With the media gone the protesters lost their enthusiasm and quietly slipped away leaving a mess of litter and protest signs.  There were some portable toilets available, but not nearly enough to handle the large crowd, so the area around Elmo’s home was not only a mess but also a health hazard.

* * *

Once the protesters had left, Kingsley Dasher slowly made his way to Elmo’s residence not knowing what he would find.  He climbed the front steps and knocked on the door.  The Elmo that greeted him was one he didn’t know.  The man appeared beaten, the image of a lost soul.  Before he could stop himself, Kingsley asked, “How are you doing, Elmo?”

Elmo stood with slumped shoulders, and dark-rimmed eyes answered with a raspy voice, “I’ve been better.”

“May I come in?”

“Of course.  I wouldn’t mind a little company right now.”  Elmo led his friend into the living room and offered him a seat.

Kingsley said, “You had to endure quite a ruckus, Elmo.  I feel guilty that I was the one who pointed out the obvious use of your invention.  I suspected something might happen once the existence of your invention was made known, but I never imagined the level of hostility.  The reality is our society is a fickle society.  It professes one set of values, but it is mere lip service.  The values that are actually in practice are completely different from those voiced.  

“Money is the value our society holds dearest.

“Your invention would have saved millions of dollars, perhaps billions in doing away with the prison system and at the same time providing swift justice for the guilty.  But at the same time it would have deprived hundreds maybe thousands of people of their livelihood.  Construction workers and prison guards would suffer, and let us not forget the lawyers with their endless appeals.  Society has problems with such sudden changes no matter how beneficial they are.”

Kingsley then took a moment to look around and wondered where Mildred was.  “How is Mildred handling all this?”

“Not very well.  The day the protests began she left for her sister’s home in Santa Fe.  I call but she refuses to talk to me.”

“I’m sure she’ll come around once all this is over.  It will just take some time.  This whole experience was quite a blow for both of you.  To say it was a life-disrupting event would be putting it mildly.”

The two men sat in silence for a while and then the phone rang.  Elmo jumped up hoping it was Mildred but he was to be extremely disappointed and further upset.

“Hello,” he said.

Kingsley watched Elmo’s face and immediately knew the news was not good.  Elmo had little to say during the short call.  After hanging up, he told Kingsley, “That was a representative of the American Civil Liberties Union calling to notify me that they are issuing a class-action lawsuit on behalf of prisoners, families of prisoners and ex-convicts.  Apparently there are organizations of defense lawyers also preparing lawsuits.  This whole thing is just getting worse and worse.

I was hoping to patent the device and make some money.  Now it appears it may cost me everything I have.  This is definitely not going to bring Mildred home.”

Kingsley knew that Elmo needed to be alone.  He rose and said, “I would suggest you issue a statement saying that upon further consideration, you’ve decided to discontinue any further attempts in patenting or selling your machine.

“Your science was sound, Elmo.  Society just wasn’t prepared for such a sudden advance.”

Kingsley left Elmo sitting on the couch, a man in love with science and defied by society.

November 9, 2023 at 4:28 am Leave a comment

SUBMITTED: ELMO’S INVENTION

A few days ago, after many rewrites, I finally finished my novella, Elmo’s Invention.  This 16,500 word work is a prequel to my first published Elmo novella, Elmo’s Sojourn, available from Melange Books.

Completing this current novella took quite longer than it should.  Life’s been rough but that’s part of the experience.  But once finished, off it went to Melange Books hopefully with a happy outcome.

Not to give too much away, Elmo’s Invention is the story of a Los Alamos scientist, Elmo, who tinkers in his cellar with ‘off the wall’ ideas that no one would pay him to pursue.  In the course of his tinkering, he invents the perfect prison, but that was not the result he was after.

If this stirs your interest, I’ll let you know if it is published and you interest can be satisfied.

Here are some links where you may purchase my work.

Melange Books

http://www.melange-books.com/authors/walttrizna/index.html

Barnes & Noble.com

http://www.barnesandnoble.com/s/walt-trizna?store=book&keyword=walt+trizna

Amazon.com

http://www.amazon.com/s/ref=nb_sb_noss?url=search-alias%3Dstripbooks&field-keywords=walt+trizna

September 24, 2015 at 5:41 pm Leave a comment


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