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WHAT IS AN ‘INFO DUMP’?

                            WHAT IS AN ‘INFO DUMP’?

What is an ‘info dump’?

A ‘info dump’ is something writers try to avoid. In my opinion, an ‘info dump’ slows down the story and may result in boring the reader. Here is the condition which could result in an ‘info dump’ if the writer is not careful. It would be interesting if you now thought about some of the stories you have read and whether they contained an ‘info dump’ and if it affected your appreciation of the story. Say there’s a situation in a story which requires a detailed explanation to carry the story along. How the writer decides to explain these details could result in the story shifting from a story to a lecture and possibly bore the reader. What I usually do is first determine how much detail the reader needs to understand what is happening in the story. Then I deliver the knowledge usually with characters discussing the situation rather than writing a detailed explanation to inform the reader of what is involved in what is occurring in the story. Conversation between characters avoids an ‘info dump’. In my story, Martian Rebirth, I use the head of NASA conducting a press conference to include some prion information in the

June 10, 2025 at 6:22 pm Leave a comment

THINK NO EVIL

       This story was accepted for publication by Nocturnal Ooze in November 2006.

                                                  THINK NO EVIL

I have always had an active imagination.  If I had had the courage to put a bullet through my head when I first realized the consequences of my thoughts, you dear reader, would have more than five days to live.  I suggest, for your own sanity, you put down this story.  Now! 

Consider yourself warned.

I used my vivid imagination to write works of science fiction and had some measure of success.  I was no Ray Bradbury, but I was able to make a reasonable living with my novels with flashy covers showing alien worlds and their weird residents.  The occasional scantily clad Earth females depicted on the covers didn’t hurt sales either.  I would let my imagination run wild and my pen would follow.  I do not know the true extent of the powers, but I fear I may have done some damage light years from Earth.

The first hint of my peculiar ability occurred a month ago.  I visited a bagel shop early one morning, as was my habit, to avoid crowds.  In my southeastern Pennsylvania community, three people constitute a crowd, four a mob.

I entered the store and found, and much to my satisfaction, I was the only customer.  A husband and wife owned and ran the establishment.  They were always there together.

I placed my order, and as I stood idly, a strange thought emerged.  How easy it would be to rob this store at this early hour.  I could write a mystery.  It would be my first attempt at something other than science fiction.  My mind was consumed with plotting the crime, and as I waited for my bagels, my thoughts set up the robbery scene.  Seven days later, that store was robbed and the couple murdered.

What a strange coincidence, I thought, as I read the newspaper.

A few days after the robbery, I was driving along an interstate highway behind an old pickup truck.  A ladder was propped up against the tailgate.  I imagined the truck hitting a large bump in the road and the ladder being hurled from the truck and through the windshield of the car following.  I switched lanes and forgot the vision. 

Seven days later a horrendous accident happened, almost identical to the scene I imagined.  It made the local news.

This time I was shaken.  Was this just a second coincidence?

I tried an experiment.  I pictured a week of continuous rain.  We were under drought restrictions at the time, so I thought this would be an innocent and perhaps beneficial test.  Exactly seven days later, the rains poured down and rivers overran their banks.  I had forgotten about the rivers.  Property was ruined.  Lives were lost.

To avoid more damage, I went back to writing science fiction.  Fiction that I ensured occurred far from this planet.

Then it happened.  Two days ago, after I vowed never to conjure up stories about the here and now, I slipped.  I was writing a story about an alien ship traveling through an asteroid belt.  Before I knew it, my mind was picturing the asteroid that impacted the Earth some sixty-five million years ago causing the extinction of the dinosaurs.  But God help me, my mind wandered and took another step.  I wondered what the Earth would be like if an asteroid ten times the size of the one that killed the dinosaurs impacted the Earth.

We have five days left.

                                                 THE END

December 14, 2023 at 8:27 pm Leave a comment

Elmo’s Invention Chapter V

ELMO’S PRISON

When Kingsley rose, everyone looked in his direction.  It was not unprecedented that he would speak at a meeting, but it was definitely a rare occurrence.  What Kingsley said to the group would usually solve the problem at hand.  Elmo prepared to hear great things from Kingsley and gain insight on how to fix his machine.

After once again clearing his throat, whether to gain everyone’s attention or because he found talking to be an effort, no one was sure, he began to speak.  “Elmo, you must be rewarded for your effort.  Although you have not accomplished what you set out to accomplish, and perhaps never will, your invention could possibly change the course of society.  I have no doubt that mankind will greatly benefit from your invention, if they choose to embrace its benefits is a different matter.  Only time will tell.”

Elmo, along with the rest of the group, was both puzzled and full of anticipation.

Kingsley continued, “However, I am a mathematician and not an ethicist and cannot predict the consequences of your discovery.”

Elmo said, “I am totally lost.  You say I have made a great discovery, yet at the same time say that its use will produce ethical problems.”

“That’s correct, Elmo.  Your invention, in my mind, would be the perfect prison.”

Elmo, along with William and James, stared at Kingsley in total disbelief, and then slowly began to understand what he was saying.

After a few moments of deep thought, Harold Kinter voiced his thoughts to the gathering, “Of course, I can see it now.  Elmo, your invention, though unintended, could do away with prisons as we know them.  Year-long sentences could be served in a matter of minutes.  It would save society millions of dollars and save prisoners from the dangers inherent in incarceration.

“Think of it!  No matter what the length of a prisoner’s sentence, the punishment could be delivered in a matter of minutes.  Your invention could funnel money into projects that benefit society, and save prisoners from harm.”

They all looked at Elmo.  His visage was one of disappointment and disbelief.  “I meant my invention to be a time machine; instead you say I invented the perfect prison.  I failed.”

Kingsley stepped totally out of character and attempted to comfort his colleague.  “Elmo, some of the greatest discoveries in the world were made by accident.  Look at all the lives that were saved by the discovery of penicillin.  If Fleming had not noticed that petri dish with mold and dying bacteria, who knows how long it would have taken for someone else to discover that life-saving antibiotic.

“Think of the value of your discovery, and someday I am sure that you will determine the principle behind the device.  With your invention, no matter the length of a prisoner’s sentence it could be served in minutes with virtually no expense to society.  And when it comes to a death sentence, your machine can accomplish that too, but a death sentence is a death sentence no matter how it is accomplished.

Then James Forsyth began to speak, “I can think of another question which requires an answer. After a prisoner serves his term in your machine, what is his mental state? Is his mind the same as it was before the prison term? Or does his mind age along with his body?  Although I cannot imagine how the mind ages with the lack of experience.”

Elmo can think of no answer to the question of mind aging. I feel this can only be determined with the test of a said, “I human subject. But I must add I owe a great deal of gratitude for introducing important questions I had not considered.” 

“Your device could save society millions, perhaps billions of dollars and funnel the revenue into efforts that would better society.  Education, medical research, providing for the elderly and that is only the tip of the iceberg of what could be affected by this machine.  But I fear there will be obstacles to this scenario which I cannot anticipate.

“You see, our society is inconsistent.  It professes one set of values, yet lives by another.  We say how important education is, but we do not support it the way we should, not to mention that the key to education is parental input.  We pay lip service to medical advancement, but do not fund the conjecture that could become reality.  And when a discovery is made, many times it is beyond the reach of those who would benefit.  We say we value the elderly, yet turn away when we could make their final years more comfortable. 

“I fear there will be great objection to your discovery, but cannot anticipate the form it will take.  Good luck, Elmo.  You have a difficult path ahead of you.”

November 5, 2023 at 8:27 pm Leave a comment

THE GIVER BY LOIS LOWRY: AN OPINION FAR FROM THE USUAL

The other day I was getting my seasonal haircut, when I began discussing books with my barber and authors she enjoyed.  During our conversation she mentioned The Giver.  I have read this book and the books concept remains a sore point for me.  I found it lacking in belief, even for fiction.

I know who am I, a totally unknown writer, and who am I to detract from a classic, but here it goes.

I had no problem with most of the story until the fact was revealed in the warped world of The Giver, all you needed to do is cross a bridge over a river and enter the world of normality.  Salvation was just on the other side of this bridge, yet no one dared cross it.  I find that unexplainable.  Perhaps my readers can tell me how my thinking is wrong.  My barber said they did not cross the bridge because they had been brainwashed.  I feel it should have taken a lobotomy.

I shall now boldly go where no one in their right mind has gone.

I shall suggest an alternate ending to the novel.  I would have preferred to see the novel take this turn.  On the other side of the bridge there exists a sinister forest constantly cloaked in darkness.  In this forest reside malevolent beasts, some part human, who kill and devour all foreign life they find.  The journey through this forest would be dangerous beyond belief, but I feel some barrier must exist for the souls inhabiting the land of the Giver, to overcome.

Beyond this forest is another bridge over another river which these monsters of the forest dare not cross.  Beyond this bridge lies a normal society.  Those who risk the forest will find a fulfilled life.

That’s how I would have ended the story.

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February 29, 2016 at 9:36 pm Leave a comment


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